Hello CAG,
1 Date of the infringement 28/08/2021
2 Date on the NTK [this must have been received within 14 days from the 'offence' date] First NTK not available
3 Date received Don't Know
4 Does the NTK mention schedule 4 of The Protections of Freedoms Act 2012? [Y/N?] Don't know
5 Is there any photographic evidence of the event? Yes
6 Have you appealed? [Y/N?] post up your appeal] No
7 Who is the parking company? Civil
OK, I've had a first go. I haven't touched your version at all but suggest a tweaked version below.
1. Gone is your CHANGE OF CIRCUMSTANCE section which I don't think has anything to do with establishing whether you owe the money or not.
2. I've slimmed down the DOUBLE RECOVERY section but also underlined other fictitious charges they have made up.
3. The bits in the BPA CoP are here https://www.britishparking.co.uk/write/Documents/AOS/AOS_Code_of_Practice_January_20